Ok……part Dos……..kids Book Ages 3-7 For A School Project….?
walk orderly back to the classroom” the other children looked at her like she was crazy. since when did Mandy talk like that?
“hey, Mandy throw me that ball, it’s cool” said billy. “no, billy, we must proceed to the principals office to find out why the playground is closed,’ said Mandy. as they walked down the hall, Mandy thought “I feel wonderful, totally in control. I can save the playground” as they went into the office, the secretary stopped Mandy, and asked her to leave the ball on her desk. Mandy reluctantly placed the ball on the desk. suddenly Mandy was scared, her confidence dropped. “Oh, no, i don’t want to say anything, you talk billy!” gone was the special feeling she had while holding the ball. she knew the ball was magic, she rushed back out to the secretaries desk and grabbed the ball “sorry, Mrs. smith I need this.
Mr. Davis was sitting behind his desk looking over sum blueprints, when the group of kids walked in, “what can I do for you children?” everyone began to talk at once. “hey, guys, one person at a time, please,” sed Mandy. billy began “what’s going on with our playground?” “oh, so that’s why you are in such a “tizzle”? said Mr. Davis. “im sorry but there will be no more playground at north park elementary. recess will be taken in the gymnasium.” “what?!? you gotta be kidding me , no way, im quitting school if you do that” “no guys, calm down, let’s listen to Mr Davis, and can grasp at what he is talking about” interrupted Mandy. ” you see children, we need a new library, a new cafeteria, and a new teacher’s lounge, if you would like to discuss this further, bring your parents to the school board meeting tomorrow night.” “we shall be there,” replied Mandy “go on back to class now, kids” said Mr Davis.
they headed back down the hallway, Mandy pulled Stan, Cartman, Kenny and Kyle to the side, “you guys are not going to believe this, this ball is magic, I feel like I have the ability to talk to anyone, I’m full of confidence, I feel like I can do anything” “let me see it!” cried billy “here, but be careful” said Mandy, and she hands the ball to Cartman, Cartman’s fingers start to tingle, his face lights up, “Mandy, you were not jesting (joking) this is simply amazing
ok, I dont think this good for 3-7 year old. You need to simplified.
Instead of saying her confidence dropped say her confidence evaportated. Try to base your story on kid issues. Make a fable (story with a lesson; unless your doing that) Instead of saying gone was the special feeling say her new found courage left her just as quick as it had come. Take the parenthesis off tizzle. In the sequence “you gottta be joking. No Way! I’m quitting school if you do that. Revise “can grasp at what he is talking about”. say let mr. gibson speak. He may have some good ideas. Mandy is a little girl so you don’t want her talking like she is on Leave it to Beaver. Put a period after hallway. Yeah, jesting is not the right word lol. It might be a better idea to just say something more kiddish.